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Friday, 4 January 2013

Fire & Ice


She had stepped out for only a moment; she assumed it would be the same cold and dark night as usual. But now, she was standing there in the light drizzle staring mystified at the sky, for almost twenty minutes. The sky which was not dark and brooding like everyday but orange as if it burned. It was extraordinary, beautiful yet scary. Transfixed she looked at the wide stretched horizon, the burn started deep from one end and faded into the grey sky at the other diagonal end. The night was lit like day, but sun had set long ago and not even midnight was upon them yet. She shivered despite the several layers she wore, something invoked deep inside her as she tore her gaze reluctantly from the orange sky, suppressing the urge to cry at it, she rushed inside.
She huddled in the three blankets, squeezing into a ball, hugging herself but not managing to stop trembling. She ducked inside, sealing all sides of the blankets, breathing hard in the stuffy air, wishing the cold to subside. She dare not even take an inch of her out; she felt cold as ice but her temperature rose way above. A fire blazed deep within her while the rest of her body turned to ice.

-Momina.


34 comments:

  1. follow my blog please?
    this is really good
    http://a-step-in-to-my-world.blogspot.co.uk/

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    1. Thank you, very much.
      Following! :)

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  2. How beautiful!
    Every work of yours show the magnification of imagination.
    Amazing works!
    There's a presumption in my head everytime I am about to read your work which says, try and keep the concentration up, there's something exceptionally good coming to it!

    Take Care :)

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    1. Thank you so much! And your words always bring a smile on my face!
      I am so glad and I hope there is never a disappointment. :)

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  3. This is beyond your age girl what are you like 27?
    Totally amazing just muddles you,you know

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    1. Haha, no only 18!
      Thank you, glad you liked it. :)

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  4. That was moderately dark, I liked it. One of the weirdest feelings there is is shivering when warm, and being unable to warm up, even when you know you should be warm.

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    1. Thank you, Mark.
      That is a very distinct and queer feeling, and it's more likely to be associated with fear.

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  5. This is beautiful Momina!
    And so much in accordance with the weather too :P
    Keep up the good work :)

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    1. Thank you, Aqsa. The weather was kind of an inspiration for this.

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  6. I do wonder what similarity was there between her feelings and the sky that she felt grief and fear both at the same time.

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    1. I wonder too, it's one of the pieces that are partially incoherent to even me. Something I wrote suddenly.

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  7. This short tale was suspenseful and enjoyable.

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    1. Thank you, Floral Blossoms. I am glad you enjoyed it! :)

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  8. @joy not really she's only 18 :D
    Loved it M perfect hai

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  9. As Ph_ said, One of the best! :) This was little dark and speak volumes. I loved the way you strike the similarity between the weather and her. Just one word for the write-up : Awesome! :) Everytime i come here and leave with more expectations of the next post, I am not disappointed :)

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    1. I am very glad you liked it, thank you so much. I hope you are never disappointed!

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  10. Amazing as always. Keep it up (Y)

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  11. Beautiful piece Momina!!
    The way you weave sentences.. it just amazes me!! You're a great writer :) Keep it up!

    P.S. HAPPY NEW YEAR :) HAVE AN AWESOME-BLOSSOM YEAR AHEAD ^_^

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    1. Thank you so much, Ruya!

      Happy new year to you too. Hope this year is brilliant for you!

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  12. Magestic....!!
    Simply awesome, the way you have crafted your script its beautiful!

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    1. Thank you, a lot. You are very kind.

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  13. This is crafty and imagination at it's best. The last line is like just cherry on the cake!

    Loved the simple yet poignant use of words and feelings.
    Do drop by at my place too.

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    1. Thank you, Arcane.
      I am glad you loved it!
      Will do.

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  14. The last line makes me wonder if she ever felt better.

    ✗ℴ ♡

    +To Me It Matters+

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    1. Or if she ended right there and then.
      Thank you for dropping by! :)

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  15. Melancholic. I fathom what we right is quite similar...

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